Tree to Tree

Tree to Tree August 2005 | Filed under Doors and Windows, Photos, Travel | Comments (1)

From 'Brief', the garden of Bevis Bawa, near Bentota, Sri Lanka

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soraya says:

Hi,
I am a boutique publisher of coffee table books and currently we are working on a charity fund raising project. We love your Tree to tree picture from Bevis bawa's Brief garden in Sri lanka and would be interested in using it for the cover of our fund raising brochure. Please do let me know if this image belongs to you and what reproduction rates would be. We are looking at no more than 200 copies of an 8 page brochure with no commercial value. If we were to use this image for the book we will ask for a separate quote. Thanks adn regards
Soraya

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This sentence is not modelled on a luxury yacht

11 January 2008
Filed under Language, Text, The Media

People paid up to $US100,000 ($A115,000) for the inaugural Singapore Airlines A380 flight last year, in which first class suites with real beds were modelled on luxury yachts, after wiring glitches caused the plane’s delivery to be delayed by two years, causing EADS billions of dollars in losses.

This sentence was already too long when they decided to add the bit about the beds. Why on earth is it relevant, when reporting on an airport mishap, to note that the beds on the plane involved were modelled on luxury yachts?*

It’s a really common construction in stories coming straight off the wires and into the paper: you have the story, which is usually two or three short paragraphs, followed by a gargantuan sentence into which somebody has packed the entire history of the subject, with no regard to whether the clauses in the sentence relate to each other or to the story at large.

* Update: I can’t read.

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